Writing Task 1: Visits to Australia

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Question: The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors come from.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

IELTS Academic Writing task 1 sample 6

Number of Visitors (million)

1975

2005

SOUTH KOREA
JAPAN
CHINA
USA
BRITAIN
EUROPE

2.9
3.2
0.3
0.4
0.9
1.1

9.1
12.0
0.8
1.1
2.9
4.5

 Total

8.8

30.4

 

Sample answer:

The graph presents the number of yearly visits to Australia by foreigners from 1975, 1985, 1995 and 2005. Meanwhile, the table indicates the regions where these visitors originated. Overall, it can be seen that the number of visits to Australia peaked in 2005, and majority of these travels were due to people from Japan.

In 1975, there were about 10 million travels to Australia and this number steadily increased by about 5 million visits every 10 years, until reaching roughly 30 million in 2005. Meanwhile, there was a total of 8.8 million people who visited Australia in 1975, and a significant portion of it came from Japan (3.2 million visitors). The number of travelers to Australia considerably increased by almost 22 million in 2005, with Japan still having he most number of people who went to Australia.

It can also be noted that both in 1975 and 2005, Australia had the largest number of Japanese and South Korean visitors (Japan: 3.2 million in 1975 and 12 million in 2005; South Korea: 2.9million in 1975 and 9.1 million in 2005). In the meantime, China had the least foreign travels to Australia in both time periods (0.3 million travelers in 1975 and 0.8 million in 2005).

Word count: 273

Score: 8.5

Comments: Good introduction with very clear overview

 

 

 

 

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